段落怎么写，写英语作文 大考考生如何不当“背诵模板和套作”的“受害者”

文/刘宝彩/天津

对于你提出“哪位大佬可以帮我看看这个英语作文错在哪里？”的问题，我分五个部分回答你如下：一、先看你写的原文；二、你写作的有效句；三、英语为母语人写作英语的原理及其分步骤操作方法；四、分五个步骤操作的各句的汇总段落；五、对你写作英语作文的点评。

一、先看你写的原文

Being Village Officials, A new Future

These years there is an interesting situation that some students from famous colleges go to village to be village officials. To this situation,different people have different opinions.Here are some popular opinions.

Just as a coin has two sides this situation is that, too. Some people are happy to see that and they think it is a good way to help to improve the development of the villages and it can help improve the equality of different places.However, some others have different thoughts about it. The reason for their concept is that they think it is a waste of education and they think that the college graduates can do something more meaningful instead of being village officials. These concepts are both reasonable and acceptable.

But for me, I think it is a good situation for society because it can help the poor children in poor areas have the same opportunity as the children in rich areas.This is my opinion. So, what is your opinion? Can you tell me?

二、你写作内容有效的句子

some students from famous colleges go to village to be village officials.

it is a good way to help to improve the development of the villages and it can help improve the equality of different places. it is a waste of education. help the poor children in poor areas have the same opportunity as the children in rich areas

三、英语为母语人写作英语的原理及其分步骤操作方法

对于你写的英语作文，我觉得你确实努力把英语知识输入和输出了。为此你需要参考英语输出的方法，例如，英语为母语的人使用逻辑思维四种方法写作英语，即：①一因一果，②一因多果，③多因一果，④多因多果。其表达的最基本的形式——以提示观点句为中心，左找原因，右找结果。这样一步一步推理写作英语作文——写出的英语作文就完全符合以英语为母语的人写作英语的标准了。

写好（大考）英语作文，你需要考虑的思路是——根据主题，由四个部分所构成如下：㈠说出主题；㈡主题产生的原因；㈢主题产生的结果；㈣达到这种结果应该采取什么措施；㈤未来展望继续推理，这五个问题阐述清楚了，就OK了。因此根据主题Being Village Officials, A new Future而完成这五个步骤，具体操作如下：

步骤㈠说出主题：Being village officials is set in new future of university graduates, whose prospects for employment look bright.

步骤㈡主题产生的原因

The job to be done in rural areas gave university graduates a practical chance to apply their the knowledge they had acquired at university.

步骤㈢主题产生的结果

This helps countryside with high-quality development to occur economically.

步骤㈣达到这种结果应该采取什么措施

The at-all-level governments are asked to seek the perfectly-creative solutions to problems university graduates faced in life and at work during their stay in countryside.

步骤㈤展望继续推理

They bring rural areas to improve in electrically-commercial management, financial and medical management and up-to-date education, etc. by putting their theory into practice. This proves immensely popular with farmers, turning rural areas favourable for making so much progress fully in all fields, in my belief.

四、分五个步骤操作各句的汇总段落如下

Graduating from universities, some students would be requested to be village’s officials, which are considered as being impractical, according to some people. That will go to waste on educational resources. By comparison with this, these village officials are set in new future of university graduates, whose prospects for employment look bright. As seen from this, the job to be done in rural areas gave university graduates a practical chance to apply their the knowledge they had acquired at university.

This helps the rural areas with high-quality development to occur economically, enabling the at-all-level governments to seek the perfectly-creative solutions to problems faced by university graduates who are in life and at work during their stay in countryside.

They bring rural areas to improve in electrically-commercial management, financial and medical management and up-to-date education, etc. by putting their theory into practice. This proves immensely popular with farmers, turning rural areas favourable for making so much progress fully in all fields, in my belief.

五、对你写作英语作文的点评

根据上述“三、英语为母语人写作英语的原理及其分步骤操作方法”和“四、分五个步骤操作各句的汇总段落”之讲解，对于你提出的“哪位大佬可以帮我看看这个英语作文错在哪里？”问题，到现在你可能明白了究竟哪里有错了。你写英语作文中斜体字的句子是“相似度”极其高的句子，也就是说，模板句多尽管语法没错（其意中文思维英文词语表达）。所以说你写的斜体字的模板句子都是无效的句子，你花费了宝贵时间背诵模板结果事倍功半，甚至功零，这样判阅卷老师见到“模板套作”就降档次扣分数没商量！与之相反，你需要有一个理念：写英语作文要“不靠模板靠逻辑”，才能把英语作文写得与众不同，才能让大考英语判阅卷老师给你写的英语作文——升档次提分数得高分甚至满分。

当然，对于“背诵模板和套句”这件事，绝对不能责怪你，因为你也是一“受害者”，受到相关“假”资料或受到相当多“急功尽力走捷径”人的影响，才背模板和范文的。为此你通过今天提交的这篇英语作文得到帮助认识到：英语为母语人写作英语的原理及其操作方法，这是最大收获：写英语作文 大考考生不当“背诵模板和套作”的“受害者”！